Another great word for my novel writing page from One Minute Writer
***Note this is a process so nothing is really in order, this is mostly a place for me to 'scribble' my thoughts****
First Day on the Job: (Epilogue)
Addie cautiously opened the stain glass door at 312 North Ave E., this was it, her first day of the job. She was finally working in the real world. She had dreamed of this day for so long now. After all the hours writing and acting, dancing and playing, blocking and choreography high school and college theater this was the real thing. Her first real world job. Her own.
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What caught my attention right away was the "Addie cautiously opened the stain glass door at 312 North Ave E." Personally, I find that it draws me into the scene more if I can see what the character can see, which leads me into what is next (it helps me with writing, too.) So what would appeal to me as a reader would be written more like this (I have also rewritten part of the rest of the paragraph):
Stuff [in brackets] is supposed to be in italics, which I do when italics aren't an option.
Addie glanced at the street sign. "[North Ave E]" she thought. Knowing that she would never forget the address, she hurried past the sign, brushing something off her coat sleeve. "[I'm being stupid]," she thought, forcing herself to slow her pace. "[I'm fifteen minutes early on the first day on a real-world job, for goodness' sake!]" Slowly walking up to the door, she put her hand on the door handle, glancing at the stained-glass design of a stage with small figures on it, underneath the scarlet "312." Cautiously opening the door, she thought back to the hours writing and acting, dancing and playing, blocking and choreography high school and college theater, "[and the dreams...]" she remembered, "[so long now that I've dreamed of this... the real thing. My first real world job. My own job.]"
I hope this is helpful,
Timothy Perkins
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